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he said,
"i know what you're thinking
you think that you're dying
perhaps you are dreaming
three days you're sleepwalking
are you frightened of me?
because i think that you are
i think that you've been wanton of me
i know what you're thinking.

"i know why you're here
you and i have so much in common
hunters killers predators alike
i wanted to ask you
are you the kind of killer
cold hearted and apathetic
or do you witness and mourn
the light of life
extinguish in the pupils of your
victims eyes?

"i know what you're thinking
i know what you want
i've been patient far long enough
i think i deserve this."
©2009-2010 *DgenRetEliteRabbit
:icondgenreteliterabbit:

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i've been working on something, this is a piece of it.


there's a silence surrounding me
i can't seem to think straight
i'll sit in the corner
no one can bother me
i think i should speak now
i can't seem to speak now
my words won't come out right
i feel like i'm drowning...

--'keep talking' pink floyd (gilmour)

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:iconcharlemaine:
curiouser and curiouser. i like. the visceral sensuality and sexuality is undeniable; the thrill of falling willingly into danger.

--
:blackrose::kiss::blackrose::kiss:
I Want Your Horror
I Want Your Design
I Want Your Love and
I Want Your Revenge.
:icondgenreteliterabbit:
i've been elaborating on this. wrote it up into a short story. part of it is up, if you'd like to read.

i figured something out while writing this.

all of these pieces where i use first person are just means in which to destory myself. i must've killed myself dozens of times now. healthy suicide, without the mess.

seriously though, i don't want to kill myself i just found that insight funny is all.

sorry, uh, thanks doll for reading. i appreciate it. :hug:

--
RUN, rabbit, run
dig that hole, forget the sun
and when at last the work is done
don't sit down, time to dig another one

steps taken forward
and sleepwalking back again...
encumbered forever by desire and ambition
#TheWritersMeow
:iconcharlemaine:
oh wow! and all the time i thought it was just a detailed sexual fantasy.

wait; was i reading something that was not there? :P

that is fascinating, woman. it's been one helluva read.. and you are 101% welcome

healthy suicide..! isn't the best way to commit suicide thru art? it lets u act out what u need to so that u can release that poison inside you, & move on.

--
:blackrose::kiss::blackrose::kiss:
I Want Your Horror
I Want Your Design
I Want Your Love and
I Want Your Revenge.
:iconalapip:
Rab,

this epic "three days long"
is quite awesome. and, you
keep us on edge, waiting...

pip

--
when a man refers to the woman,
[who chose him], as his better half,
for once, he tells the truth. - llp - nov'09
:icondgenreteliterabbit:
thanks, i finished it but i feel like it's undone. i cannot stay in the same mindset and this initially wanted to be a short story but my words won't come out right.

--
RUN, rabbit, run
dig that hole, forget the sun
and when at last the work is done
don't sit down, time to dig another one

steps taken forward
and sleepwalking back again...
encumbered forever by desire and ambition
#TheWritersMeow
:icondgenreteliterabbit:
i have to say thank you for all these heart icons, i love them!

--
RUN, rabbit, run
dig that hole, forget the sun
and when at last the work is done
don't sit down, time to dig another one

steps taken forward
and sleepwalking back again...
encumbered forever by desire and ambition
#TheWritersMeow

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